Au Goose helped me overhaul and completely change the second half and ending of Rachel’s Ascension (including the slight modification to her name–that’s not a typo). It is SO MUCH BETTER with his ideas and changes. Even if you’ve read the old one, I would recommend giving it another look–especially the second half.
WARNING! This is a VERY steamy, hard-R rated, story, so use the appropriate discretion when deciding if it’s for you.